The composition is sophisticated and well-thought-out. There's a really good use of chord progressions and harmony.
However, the performance is quantized and does not breathe. Each note is the same each time, it sounds like MIDI with a fixed velocity for each note. You should play it in and edit it as little as possible, sacrifice some perfection in performance for better heart. You can always cut together a few partial performances if you get nervous in front of a... [more] posted to MeFi Music by lupus_yonderboyat 6:33 PM on August 21, 2006
They don't allow linebreaks in music.metafilter for some reason -- my posting had 'em.
Great cut, full of energy, and the vocals are particularly well mixed -- it's a constant complaint of mine that the texture and for that matter the lyrics are lost in high-energy lyrics.
On the downside :-D that high-pitched snare drum is horrid! Is it a drum machine or is it compressed to death? I'd try to insert a little variation so each hit is just a... [more] posted to MeFi Music by lupus_yonderboyat 6:21 PM on August 21, 2006
Awww, thanks. Would that we'd had encouragement like this at the time! I don't do as much songwriting any more, I'd rather just play... posted to MeFi Music by lupus_yonderboyat 7:52 AM on August 17, 2006
I liked the ending... however, I did get pretty sick of that initial loop very fast, and it was easy to guess when new loops would be added or subtracted.
I personally like songs that are dangerous in some respect, that have tension or surprises. I think most people don't but I still think you should change things up at least once for a long while so people completely forget about the initial loop and are happy to come back to it. posted to MeFi Music by lupus_yonderboyat 7:33 AM on August 16, 2006
There's a lot you can do. A simple thing is to pass the loop through many effects and then switch them on and off or send a modulation signal to them.
In one direction, the Orb is one of the very cleverest loop users -- there's a long version of "Towers of Dub" on I think UF Off where they spend several minutes just playing with a single sequencer loop without ever losing tension (though you realize after a bit that it's at least three carefully blended loops... [more] posted to MeFi Music by lupus_yonderboyat 6:20 PM on August 16, 2006
It's the sort of thing I like, and it came together quite well -- but it's not clear that it distinguishes itself from a gazillion other tracks in this vein.
I'd particularly single out the kick and snare, and the lead synth, for this criticism. The lead synth sound is loud, and doesn't evolve with time -- it's always brassy and loud -- it needs another souce of modulation.
The kick and snare are, well, regular (though these speakers aren't that... [more] posted to MeFi Music by lupus_yonderboyat 7:40 AM on August 16, 2006